Writing exercises

My friend The_GM challenged me to flex my writing muscles. In turn, I challenged her to post her writings up here with mine for open critique.

A few warnings!

• We're looking for constructive critique. Flame wars won't be tolerated. The_GM likes to nuke the site from orbit.
• There may be the occasional adult-oriented content out here. We might even swear sometimes. If we start getting obscene, we'll turn on the adult content site features.

Otherwise, enjoy the reading and feel free to post your thoughts, suggestions, etc.